chal tuDmoH 'engmey SISmoH rewve' reghmoH yav QommoH bIQtIqmey QaDchoHmoH ngengmey pubmoH bIQ'a'mey HajmoH naghmey bechmoH HuDmey DejmoH tera' SaQmoH pe'bIl'a' ghaH ghaHmo' SIH Hoch qIvDu' ghaHmo' jel Hoch qa'pu' ghaHmo' QIlchoH Hoch woQ'a'Daj ghov 'ev chan 'ev woQ'a'Daj chID tIng chan tIng woQ'a'Daj Sov chan woQ'a'Daj laj tIng 'ev Hoch lughID mInDu'Daj qo' Hoch veltaH qa'Daj 'u' Hoch qattaH ngay'Daj meQtaHbogh qul ghaH Hovmey'e', ghaH wov law' Hoch wov puS Qunpu'e', ghaH Dun law' Hoch Dun puS reH tera'vamDaq leng melkor.. meQchoHDI' weQmey, tIqwIjDaq meQchoH qullIj qIj jaghpu'wI' jaghna' SoH jaghpu'wI', Qughna' SoH jaghpu'wI', lotna' SoH melkor.. mobchu'wI'pu' pIn'a' SoH; 'ej mulonta'DI' eru, jIHvaD pawta' muDechtaHvIS ngay'lIj, muHotlaH pagh muDechtaHvIS ngay'lIj, woghlaH pagh muDechtaHvIS ngay'lIj, mujeylaH pagh melkor, qa'wIj qul melkor, tIqwIj tamghay melkor, yInwIj joH'a' melkor, not mevbogh ram.. melkor, qa'wIj qa', melkor, 'IwwIj qIj, melkor, Hurghchu'ghach'a'wIj, nIquvmoHjaj tlhuHbogh Hoch DaH.. reH.. ~ hjkhjkhj
On 8/13/2019 12:26 PM, mayqel qunen'oS wrote:
muj:
jaghpu'wI', Qughna' SoH jaghpu'wI', lotna' SoH lugh: jaghpu'wI' Qughna' SoH jaghpu'wI' lotna' SoH
potlhqu' tlhavqop! -- SuStel http://trimboli.name
On 8/13/2019 12:20 PM, mayqel qunen'oS wrote:
chal tuDmoH 'engmey SISmoH rewve' reghmoH yav QommoH bIQtIqmey QaDchoHmoH ngengmey pubmoH bIQ'a'mey HajmoH naghmey bechmoH HuDmey DejmoH tera' SaQmoH pe'bIl'a' ghaH ghaHmo' SIH Hoch qIvDu' ghaHmo' jel Hoch qa'pu' ghaHmo' QIlchoH Hoch
Etc. I really like this use of repetition. I've always felt that rhyme had little place in Klingon poetry, since you usually just end up rhyming the same suffixes over and over again. What you've done here has not only repeated words or suffixes, but a repeated beat (with minor variations). I could see this being used in a march or fanfare. I imagine it chanted rather than put to music. -- SuStel http://trimboli.name
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