[tlhIngan Hol] subject of the -bogh clause of a sao being the subject of another verb

This is rather twisted, but it came to me and I can't not ask. Qap yuQDaj 'e' tul nuv a person hopes that his planet wins Qap yuQDaj 'e' tulbogh nuv luHoH romuluSngan the romulans kill the person who hopes that his planet wins And here it comes.. Qap yuQDaj; Dun 'e' tulbogh nuv his planet wins; the person who hopes that is great (I placed the semicolon just to show how I understand the sentence) Is there anything wrong with writing something like this ? I can't think of any grammar rule(s) being broken. ~ Qa'yIn