mayqel qunenoS:
wo'rIv, troy's loHmeH nIm porgh 'ay'Daq tISuSHa', 'ej borgvaD bIjatlhbe'. tlhIngan veQ SoH..
De'vID:
Commenting on just the grammar rather than the content of what you wrote: * {loH} does not mean "administer" in the sense of "deliver a substance",
That would probably be {Qay} "transfer". Okrand coined the medical term {Hergh QaywI'} "pneumatic hypo, hypospray (medical device)" seen in many episodes of Trek. Klingons use them too: Visiting exobiologist J'Dan kept a Klingon "hyposyringe" in his quarters, used to treat his Ba'ltmasor Syndrome with weekly injections (TNG "The Drumbeat"; seen in close-up).
but rather "govern"
loH administer (v) loH administration (n) loHwI' magistrate (lit. administrator") (n) loHwI' vISuch 'e' vIpoQ! I demand to see the magistrate! (ENT "Affliction") Archer's trial on Narendra III(?) for conspiring against the Klingon Empire and fomenting revolt was presided over by a magistrate. (ENT "Judgment") In 2254 the Keeper on Talos IV was addressed as "Magistrate" by the other Talosians. (TOS "The Cage/The Menagerie", Pt. II) -- Voragh tlhIngan ghantoH pIn'a' Ca'Non Master of the Klingons