jIHaDchoHta'DI',

The -ta' here is unnecessary, and could be interpreted in multiple ways; it's not strictly wrong. But if you just said jIHaDchoHDI', you're saying as soon as I begin studying, which is obviously what you're going for.

'ej jIbuS 'e' vInID,

'e' vInIDDI'

'ej SIbI' muHotchoH yIQ vay' !

vay' yIQ

or even better:

yIQwI'

ghIq jIleghmeH nachwIj vItlhe'taH, 'ej ghIch yIQ vItu' !

vItlhe'lI' would work so much better here.

On 11/23/2016 10:11 AM, mayqel qunenoS wrote:

ben law', jIHaDmeH yotlhmajDaq vIjaH.

pa', jIpawta'DI' wa'DIch quSlabDaq jIba' 'ej ghIq jIHaDchoH..

'ach, pIj qaS wanI'vam Huj:

jIHaDchoHta'DI', 'ej jIbuS 'e' vInID, pay' wab vIQoychoH. Huj wabvam 'ej tlhaQ: *sniff* *sniff* *sniiiif*..

'ej SIbI' muHotchoH yIQ vay' !

wa'DIch jIQub: qaStaH nuq jay' ? ghIq jIleghmeH nachwIj vItlhe'taH, 'ej ghIch yIQ vItu' ! mularghtaH vavwI' dog..

toH, ngugh dogvaD jIjatlh: *hey* maqoch.. Doch qaq DaqaSnISmoHbogh tu'be'lu''a' ? be' dog DaSam DaneHbe''a' ?

'ej ghIq - Do' -, jIHvo' tlheD dog..

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