On 12/7/2016 9:46 AM, mayqel qunenoS wrote:

ben puSqu', athens vIDabtaH..

pa' jIyIntaHvIS, tInmo' chuqmey, Hoch jaj puH DujwIj vISeDtaH.

I've noticed you overusing -taH recently. You haven't technically been wrong in your use, but your meaning is probably not exactly what you're writing.

Explain to me, for instance, the difference between ben puSqu' Athens vIDabtaH and ben puSqu' Athens vIDab. Also explain the difference between Hoch jaj puH DujwIj vISeDtaH and Hoch jaj puH DujwIj vISeD.

'ach qen juH vengDaq vIcheghta' 'ej naDev mach chuqmey.

machmo' chuqmeyvam, Dat vIjaHmeH jIyIt; puH Duj vIlo'be'. DaH, chaq jatlhlu': QaQ ghu' ! nIn Dalo'nISbe' !

'a napbe' ghu'..

wa' ben, puH DujwIjDaq DIS leH ta'ta' jonwI'. 'ej leHvam ta'ta'DI', mujatlh: pIjHa' puH Dujvam Dalo'ba'.. jIjang: bIlugh; chay' ghu'vam DaSov. jatlh: puH Duj bIngDaq spidermey tu'lu'.. jIjang: toH ! qay'wI' tu'lu''a'.

In the immortal words of William Strunk, "Omit needless words." Just say qay''a' vay'?

'ej ghIq mujatlh: pIj puH Duj Dalo'be'chugh vaj QapHa'choH Dujvetlh ! ..ghIq vIghel: vaj chay' jIvangnIS. 'ej jatlh: Hoch Hogh wa'logh yISeD !

Hu'tegh ! ..jIHvaD vavwI' dogmey qawmoH ghu'vam ! Hoch jaj, vIQuchmoHmeH mayIttaH jIH bIH je.

Dog Doy'qu'moHlu'meH 'ej ghatlhlu'meH dog yItmoHlu'. 'utbe' bel.

DaH, Hoch Hogh puH DujwIj vIvIHnISmoH je !

vaj dog rurchoH puH DujwIj.. ghu'vam vIparHa' !

'ach dog DamuS qar'a'?

vIghro' rur DujwIj net jalchugh vaj qaq ghu'vam.. vIghro' rurchugh vIH'eghmoHlaH.

'ej leng tIqDaq bISeDnISDI' DulobQo'bej 'ej not bIpaw.

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