What you’ve written is not grammatically valid. You can’t put a Sentence As Object in the middle of a larger sentence. The {-‘e’} always refers back to a preceding sentence, not to an encapsulated one. One is forced to have the {-‘e’} skip back to the previous sentence, not place the previous sentence into the middle of the larger sentence. Like I said, it’s ugly.

On Jun 11, 2022, at 3:43 PM, De'vID <de.vid.jonpin@gmail.com> wrote:

{QuchchoH Hoch, tlhIngan Hol ghojlu'chu' 'e' chavlu'chugh}

This sentence is perfectly grammatical. It consists of a main clause (QuchchoH Hoch everybody becomes happy) and a subordinate clause (tlhIngan Hol ghojlu'chu' 'e' chavlu'chugh if one achieves learning Klingon perfectly). The subordinate clause in turn consists of a subordinated clause ('e' chavlu'chugh if one achieves that) whose object pronoun's antecedent (tlhIngan Hol ghojlu'chu' one learns Klingon perfectly) comes just before it. That's the rule: the antecedent of 'e' or net comes immediately before the clause containing that object.

'e' must refer to the previous independent clause, not the phrase that immediately follows the previous full stop. Again, when Okrand says "sentence" in TKD, this must be read as "verbal clause." Okrand was not publishing a book as specific as you'd like it to be.

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