ghunchu'wI':

{...maHar : ngeD yIn.} That's not normal Klingon grammar. I've noticed
you doing things like this a lot lately, and it's something you need
to fix. There is nothing wrong with the syntax, but the meaning you
seem to be going for should be written using a Sentence As Object
construction: {ngeD yIn 'e' wIHar.}

I was trying to avoid using the SAO, because I feel it is the only
thing in klingon which is not direct.

Unlike in english, where we say : "we believe that..", in klingon one
must first make a statement, then take a coffee break, then say the
{'e'} - without the reader/listener - knowing that it will actually
come, and only then continue with the rest of the SAO.

It's important to remember that the form of SAO is not [S1] 'e' [S2]; it's [S1] [S2], where the object inside [S2] is 'e'. 'e' is not a conjunction.

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