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<div class="moz-cite-prefix">On 8/9/2017 10:03 AM, Jeremy Silver
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<pre wrap="">{Qo'! ...Qo'! bInarghlaHbe'. ghe''or tIqvo', SoHvaD jIDuQ; jImuSchu'mo',
SoHvaD tlhuHwIj Qav vItuy'.}
I want this to remain poetic, but replacing {ghe''or tIqvo'} with {ghe''or
qoDvo'} is already considered. I'm also choosing {SoHvaD jIDuQ} on purpose to
indicate a stab in your general direction as opposed to a direct hit. Does
this work?</pre>
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<p>I can go with <b>tIq;</b> Klingons talk about hearts
non-literally all the time.</p>
<p>To me, <b>SoHvaD jIDuQ</b> says <i>I stab for your benefit.</i>
<b>-vaD</b> doesn't have any sense of <i>general direction.</i>
You can just use a locative: <b>SoHDaq jIDuQ</b> <i>I stab at/to
you.</i> If you had said <b>qaDuQ</b> I would agree it was
wrong.</p>
<p>You might also want to change the second <b>SoHvaD</b> to <b>SoHDaq</b>.<br>
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