[tlhIngan Hol] <<poSayDon>> vImughlI'

Brian Cote wearetheinformation00 at gmail.com
Wed Jan 11 17:57:23 PST 2017

As always, great advice. Thanks!

How did I not know about {gheS}!?

And I got a little sloppy there at the end. I'll keep a better eye open for
misordered suffixes, etc.


On Tuesday, January 10, 2017, SuStel <sustel at trimboli.name> wrote:

> On 1/10/2017 5:16 PM, Brian Cote wrote:
> ghaHvaD bIQDaq 'oHbe'bogh Qu' chuplu'chugh ghaH,
> ropmoH qechvam. Qun tlhuHDaj nISchoHlu'. 'ej pujchoHmoH
> porghDaj Hosghaj.
> >And when a job away from the water was offered to him
> he would get sick at the very prospect, his divine breathing
> would become troubled and his brazen chest began to tremble.
> >Und bot man ihm eine Stellung außerhalb des Wassers an,
> wurde ihm schon von der Vorstellung übel, sein göttlicher Atem
> geriet in Unordnung, sein eherner Brustkorb schwankte.
> I see you got rid of the erroneous final *ghaH* of the first sentence in
> your correction.
> You dropped the *-'e'*on *Qu'. *Also, when using a pronoun-as-verb to
> talk about being in a place, Okrand has always used *-taH* on the
> pronoun: *ghaHvaD bIQDaq 'oHbe'taHbogh Qu''e' chuplu'chugh** if a job
> which is not at the water were is to him.*
> We have so many words for anatomy, it's strange we don't have a word for
> *chest.* Consider *ro** trunk (of body). *I wonder if a *ro* can *Qom;*
> that might be better than just saying it weakens him.
> beplaw' 'ach ghaH Harbej pagh: QeHDI' HoSghajqu'wI',
> yonmoHlu'meH, ghaHvaD Qapla'qoqmey qItHa' chavnISlaw'lu'.
> Qu'Daj choHbej poSayDon 'e' qel pagh. wa'DIchna' bIQmey Qun'a'
> mojmoHlu', 'ej vaj retlhtaHnIS.
> >Besides, his complaints were not really taken seriously; when one
> of the mighty is vexatious the appearance of an effort must be made
> to placate him, even when the case is most hopeless. In actuality
> a shift of posts was unthinkable for Poseidon — he had been appointed
> God of the Sea in the beginning, and that he had to remain.
> >Übrigens nahm man seine Beschwerden nicht eigentlich ernst;
> wenn ein Mächtiger quält, muß man ihm auch in der aussichtslosesten
> Angelegenheit scheinbar nachzugeben versuchen; an eine wirkliche
> Enthebung Poseidons von seinem Amte dachte niemand, seit Urbeginn
> war er zum Gott der Meere bestimmt worden und dabei mußte es bleiben.
> Why does he only apparently complain? I don't think you want *-law'* on
> the first sentence.
> I don't really see *Qapla'qoqmey qItHa'* as approaching *the appearance
> of an effort.* This sentence seems to lose a lot of meaning. Try
> recasting it.
> If you're using *-law'* to try to get across the "appearance" part, note
> that *-law'* tells of certainty of the speaker, not characters in the
> story.
> I have some trouble believing *wa'DIchna'* is a good way to say *in the
> beginning.* How about *qa'vam* *Genesis, the Big Bang, the origin of
> everything, the start of it all*? Use it just as it is as a time stamp.
> *mojmoHlu'* needs to be *lumojmoHlu'.* But consider using the word *gheS* *assume
> duties of* instead! Also consider using the perfective here.
> You got your suffixes in the wrong order in the last word.
> --
> SuStelhttp://trimboli.name
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